icrawfish
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Orbiting Venus
 
  35th/186   Σ26.990   Sep 22nd 2025 11:44pm
 
 
A strong bond severed is a persistent pain, and one that is neither quickly forgotten nor quickly mended.

My condolences to my neighbors who may or may not have overheard me singing past midnight trying to get this done in an evening.

LYRICS:

I let it end,
I gave you no walls to defend,
From the daggers that tore you and rended
All of the times we shared.

I can’t atone,
Not while you’re left all alone,
Not when you ought to bemoan me,
For leaving us both impaired.


Searching the stars like the sea,
Longing with all of my heart,
Searching for you next to me,
Despite how we sundered apart,

You’re orbiting Venus for me,
While I’m stuck orbiting Mars.


I’ve had my days,
Most of them rough like the waves,
Constantly feeling so hazy,
Remembering our last call,

It’s been a year,
And I’m still a vessel of tears,
Since you always looked on me dearly,
And I couldn’t look at all.


Searching the stars like the sea,
Longing with all of my heart,
Searching for you next to me,
Despite how we sundered apart,

You’re orbiting Venus for me,
While I’m stuck orbiting Mars.
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224649
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icrawfish
 
 
 
post #224649 :: 2025.09.22 11:47pm
  
  cabbage drop, kaizokuFish and damifortune liēkd this
I am realizing after the fact that the past tense of rend is in fact "rent", and not "rended"... oops
 
 
224743
Level 31 Chipist
damifortune
 
 
 
post #224743 :: 2025.09.24 8:46am
  
  cabbage drop, icrawfish and kaizokuFish liēkd this
wow, super well done! what a beautiful song

I misheard "not when you ought to bemoan me" as "not when you want to be lonely" and thought that would also go hard as a lyric
 
 
224762
Level 19 Chipist
kaizokuFish
 
 
 
post #224762 :: 2025.09.24 12:33pm
  
  cabbage drop and icrawfish liēkd this
very impressive and well written song.. wow!
vocals seem to distort at some point, but that doesn't hurt the performance in any way
 
 
225164
Level 26 XHBist
roz
 
 
 
post #225164 :: 2025.10.01 1:16pm
  
  cabbage drop and icrawfish liēkd this
nice job with the harmonies!
 
 
226677
Level 23 Pixelist
fortuna0800
 
 
 
post #226677 :: 2025.11.02 9:39am
  
  cabbage drop and icrawfish liēkd this
i love this
 
 
227309
Level 28 Chipist
kilowatt64
 
 
 
post #227309 :: 2025.11.17 10:56am
  
  cabbage drop and icrawfish liēkd this
Such cool progressions in this ballad, good lyrics! Paying attention to the bass lines too, there are some really nice bass parts
 
 

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