Let the bass cut sometimes with the arps and it will get a rhythmic push, think "Higher Ground."

melody could use additional articulation, variation, volume control imo

Agreed with all of the above, I will also add that the drums could use a fill or two.

That being said, this is a pleasant entry. That first lead instrument you use, with the quivering vibrato has an oddly strange charm I can't quite put my finger on, but it's making me grin.