something i notice - in your inbetween sections where the noise is doing cool stuff, things feel kinda free and "off the grid" so to speak, but then during the other parts of the music they feel very tied to the grid. maybe a little less rigid movement on beats by all parts could spice up the flow a bit? like moving voices at different times or just writing in a few more notes to "lead to" the next note in some parts sometimes. or having some parts duck out sometimes - a sense of space that i do definitely hear in some of your other music. it's already a very pretty, mournful piece! just something that came to mind since you asked for feedback

Also thanks dami for the feedback!! I didnt realize i had almost everything on beat I was so focused on trying some new harmonies 😂. Definitely need to keep this in mind the next time i do this