TheOfficialLobst
Level 12 Mixist
 
allgear
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For A Rose
 
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Feel free to tell me what you think! I actually want this to be more fleshed out, so I'd really appreciate feedbalk!
https://soundcloud.com/theofficiallobst/for-a-rose
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83284
Level 22 Chipist
RazerBlue6
 
 
 
post #83284 :: 2017.05.01 1:35am :: edit 2017.05.01 8:47am
  
  MiDoRi, mk7, growley and TheOfficialLobst liēkd this
I'm a slightly below high level pianist myself (don't mean to brag sorry lol), but if you need some handy tips to make it a bit more interesting for the next time:
• Try to have a bit of a dynamic tempo instead of a static one
• Try to put in small metric accents
• More dynamics lol, sorry to say but it sounds really static with the velocities
• Right hand (melody here) should be louder than the accomp (left hand)

And perhaps if you want to make the compo a bit more interesting, you could use some tritone substitutes here and there

For the rest lovely little song! Would love to make a nice jazz song with ya sometime, I smell creativity :P
 
 
83289
Level 12 Mixist
TheOfficialLobst
 
 
post #83289 :: 2017.05.01 5:47am
  
  RazerBlue6 liēkd this
Thanks, I've actually been playing piano for a while now as well! As for your point about dynamics, this was actually made in FL Studio, so I think note dynamics were a bit difficult to do, but I do agree that it needs a little more contrast. Thanks for the feedback!
 
 
84717
Level 26 Mixist
sc
 
 
 
post #84717 :: 2017.05.27 12:15am
  
  TheOfficialLobst liēkd this
I agree that the lower notes are a bit too loud. Other than that it's a nice piece.
 
 
84765
Level 23 Pixelist
MiDoRi
 
 
 
post #84765 :: 2017.05.27 5:31pm
  
  TheOfficialLobst liēkd this
Pretty sweet :3
 
 
85261
Level 25 Chipist
th4 D34D
 
 
 
post #85261 :: 2017.06.03 1:54pm
  
  TheOfficialLobst liēkd this
First chord I was pretty much sold. You are killin it bruv! great job. As for me, I can't shred on the keys for shyt, so I'll have to yield to Razero's criticism in that department. But for the average, untrained ear (my own), this is fantastic.
 
 
85273
Level 12 Mixist
TheOfficialLobst
 
 
post #85273 :: 2017.06.03 5:48pm
Dude thanks :)
 
 

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